Aesthetics: Design

4: Color Scheme: I don't like the red links on the blue at all. It's making my eyes cross and giving me a headache. Also, I realize the background matches the polka dots on her skirt, but it doesn't look good with the rest of the layout. The two blue-ish colors clash, or something like that.

6: Image: I really don't like it at all. It has nothing to do with anything and the colors clash. It's just not very pretty. I do, however, like the shape of it, the blue line, and the white brush over the top. It's not a very good image, but I love the execution.

7: Organization: Bien. It is organized, but I have a couple issues. The long list of reads is irritating to say the least. Those belong on a seperate page, because they just clutter up the main design. Also, I really hate the little [X] things before the titles of each section. It's really not an organization issue, but it's still annoying. Other than those things, it's a very well executed design. I love Ms-Dicks designs.

Written Word

8: Grammar: Some of your paragraphs are super short and you use fragments a lot. You use a lot of elipses and some stupid words (freaking?). You spell alright, though, punctuate normally, and capitalize like a sane person, so I don't have all too much to bitch about.

20: My Opinion: Started here. Well, I think the reason for this is that you feel like shit. Reason being, because this makes you sound like a spoiled brat. It's not like he doesn't care about you, because if he didn't, he just wouldn't answer the phone when you call.

Eh, this situation must suck. If she's your neice, why isn't her mother watching her? Honestly, people that don't take care of their kids are absolutely ridiculous. I also see you talking about wanting a baby. You have already said that you are 21 and want a social life, but can't because of having Kylee. Once you have a child of your own, it will be so much more overwhelming. I assume you've already thought about this, but as a personal opinion, it seems you need a couple more years to figure out the situation.

I HATE THAT! Diaryland does that to me all the time. I've gotten in the habit of copying my whole entry before posting so it doesn't fuck up.

Whoa. Use some paragraphs, PLEASE. That's ridiculous. I'm not reading that. (That's a lie, I skimmed it, you seem pretty emotional.)

Okay, what I still have to fathom is why the hell you are babysitting this child at all.

I don't know, all together, I sort of like you, which I guess is better than hating you. Sometimes you bore me and sometimes you don't. I'm just indifferent towards your diary, which again, is better for you than feeling my bitchy wrath, right?

7: Writing Style: You have age appropriate times in your writing, but other times, I swear you're 13. Just the vocabulary you use, and the defective paragraphs (example). I don't know, it's strange, it seems your mental capacity keeps changing. I don't hate you, however. I must be in a good mood lately.

Other

5: Contact: I can reach you.

3: Username: Um. It reminds me of Thirteen, cause that girl's name is Tracey. That right there is my short attention span going to work. I don't like it, very much, at all. But, then, at the same time, it makes me happy. Oh well, you can have some points.

3: Title: "She's everybody else's girl..." is a complete sentence, and therefore only the word "she's" should be capitalized. Your title s okay, but it's nothing special, I guess. I'm indecisive.

5: Link: Happy for you.

Comments: Sometimes you sound younger than your age, and I think that's what turned me off most. I'm just a hard grader, because I actually sort of liked you.

Reviewed by: Charlotte

Final Score: 68 / 100


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